Yang
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Yang
by Yang Wed Mar 17, 2010 12:43 pm
Name: Yang
Nick Name: Yan
Age: 18
Job: She works at home, as a shrine maiden. . .
Personality:
Yang has a spit personality named Ying, one is good and the other evil. She is mainly good, happy and easygoing, but piss her off she will become Ying witch it complete opposite. she kills and is vary twisted but Yang never remembers who she kills.
Appearance: Yang is the top one Okay? (Click me) Yang's Hair is Black and gold eyes. . . oh, and when she becomes Ying her skin Darkens, white Hair and eyes and cloths. . . .
History:Yang's Family had all ways lived in a Shrine, her parent died but no one knows how. Yang lives with her Grandfather that barley cares for her but doesn't show it, She don't have many friends because of Ying and moving in the shrine.She lived in a forgotten Village that was said to be full of Angels and Demons that lived in piece till Yang's Father and mother died. . . then it went to mayhem, Yan does not know who else left the Village other then her grandfather but she will know if her kind shows up just by first meat and look.
talents:All her senses and Ability are extremely above average, Japaneses Flute, Concocting to Creatures/ Animals and what not
weaknesses:Her senses can be to much to handle. .like her smell, sound, tasted Etc. cares to much for others then her self
sample RP: *Yan looked over because she smelt the blood of someone she knew got hurt and walked in that area* (is that the sample your looking for?)
Oh, and if you want me to add anything just ask =^.^=
Nick Name: Yan
Age: 18
Job: She works at home, as a shrine maiden. . .
Personality:
Yang has a spit personality named Ying, one is good and the other evil. She is mainly good, happy and easygoing, but piss her off she will become Ying witch it complete opposite. she kills and is vary twisted but Yang never remembers who she kills.
Appearance: Yang is the top one Okay? (Click me) Yang's Hair is Black and gold eyes. . . oh, and when she becomes Ying her skin Darkens, white Hair and eyes and cloths. . . .
History:Yang's Family had all ways lived in a Shrine, her parent died but no one knows how. Yang lives with her Grandfather that barley cares for her but doesn't show it, She don't have many friends because of Ying and moving in the shrine.She lived in a forgotten Village that was said to be full of Angels and Demons that lived in piece till Yang's Father and mother died. . . then it went to mayhem, Yan does not know who else left the Village other then her grandfather but she will know if her kind shows up just by first meat and look.
talents:All her senses and Ability are extremely above average, Japaneses Flute, Concocting to Creatures/ Animals and what not
weaknesses:Her senses can be to much to handle. .like her smell, sound, tasted Etc. cares to much for others then her self
sample RP: *Yan looked over because she smelt the blood of someone she knew got hurt and walked in that area* (is that the sample your looking for?)
Oh, and if you want me to add anything just ask =^.^=
Last edited by Yang on Fri Mar 26, 2010 8:51 pm; edited 2 times in total
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Re: Yang
by Itami Yakedo Fri Mar 26, 2010 3:27 pm
Disapproved, you need a sample RP...And maybe some more detail into your history...And talents and weaknesses....Read the template given.....rawr...
Interesting character.
Interesting character.
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Re: Yang
by Auqustin Walker Sat Mar 27, 2010 5:14 pm
littel harsh but.............uhhhhuh...uhhhhhuuuuuuhhh.....yeah.....idk watt im talking about..........
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Re: Yang
by Itami Yakedo Mon Mar 29, 2010 4:59 pm
Everything is fine except the sample RP...Need three lines or more. (Sample RP is needed because I need to know how well you RP...)
I'm not hard to please
Or maybe it's because i've been on too many sites that expect a crap load of work gone into your profile. And so I expect the same from the members on my site.
I'm not hard to please
Or maybe it's because i've been on too many sites that expect a crap load of work gone into your profile. And so I expect the same from the members on my site.
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Re: Yang
by Yang Mon Mar 29, 2010 5:30 pm
Q.Q @.@ uhh sorry. . . . . humm. . .well for the Rp sample. . .can you give me and Idea so that I can improve?
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Re: Yang
by Itami Yakedo Tue Mar 30, 2010 12:03 pm
Usually the RP sample is a short scene, action and reaction. Usually it would be something about the characters history; Explain whats happening and why, then, add a ending....
Er....Crap, I didn't make much sense there...
"*Yan looked over because she smelt the blood of someone she knew got hurt and walked in that area*"
Ok, this RP sample is bad because. 1. We don't know where Yan is. 2. We don't know the person who she knew got hurt and walked in this area. 3. There is no suspense, periods and commas often help with suspnese.
Erm...
Yeah I suck at helping ._.
Er....Crap, I didn't make much sense there...
"*Yan looked over because she smelt the blood of someone she knew got hurt and walked in that area*"
Ok, this RP sample is bad because. 1. We don't know where Yan is. 2. We don't know the person who she knew got hurt and walked in this area. 3. There is no suspense, periods and commas often help with suspnese.
Erm...
Yeah I suck at helping ._.
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